The Melvin Chronicles
CD Rudd's Other Projects
Some of the 910CMX members include:
El Goonish shive
Heros of CRASH
Murry & Lewy
Comics on hiatus or rarely updatingThe Wotch
Some swell, non-910CMX webcomics:
Least I Could Do
Air Force Blues
If your looking for Jeanie Bottle Reviews, try, www.JeannieBottle.com
I’m looking for suggestions on improving ‘I Dream of a Jeanie Bottle’. What do you think should be added or removed to make the site better? More artwork? pages? etc…
hmm, well all I can really think of at the moment is to change the picture of Jeanie once in a while for a holiday or something. How about she looks down at herself surprised; and in a Halloween outfit? I know it’s not much of a suggestion; but the little things can be nice y’know?
Yea, I did that on SailorSun.org and no one seemed to even notice.
Oh we noticed…
Love the new Halloween one by the way!
We were supposed to mention that we noticed that? Damn it! No one tells me things anymore.
i noticed it! it’s cool i don’t think their is much you can do to make any of your comics better they are alll ready awesome! but their is one thing… maybe some new charaaters that would be nice! and maybe that ginn person come back and scare neil that would be funny but this is your story so chose what you want and keep up the awesome work!
Well, in fairness, Saying something helps.
As Fairportfan could tell you, there’s nothing I like better than telling artists and writers how to do their jobs better than I could myself, but in this case, I’m just going to wait for you to develop the story a bit further.
I will say I’m looking for consistent world building and back story, rather than joke a day stuff, but that’s entirely my preference, and not the sort of thing I’d impose on a creator who was trying for silliness.
Also…the skin tones throw me off.
In terms of site design, I’m a big fan of navigation buttons above and below the strip, with consistent placement regardless of strip size and position in the sequence. I want to be able to leave my mouse pointer in one spot, and just repeatedly click through.
Aside from that, I got nothing.
Aside from that I got nothing. You’re doing a fine job so far.
“Aside from that…”
“Aside from that…”
Ahem. Aside from that, I’d like to be able to edit my comments. Damn these scissors I have for hands!
To have the ability to EDIT comments, you’d have to log in, which means limiting comments to members only.
There are Nav buttons to the right of the RSS link that’s stationary. The ones BELOW the comic will be impossible to have standard (without the page looking weird), since some comics are longer then others.
I think my only complaint would be I wish you could do something like one with Jeanie on Tuesday and one with Niel on Thursday so both storylines progress at about the same speed. In other words, I want more… but it’s not like a deal breaker if you can’t, or if between this and Sailor Sun two storylines at a time is enough to work on. I don’t know how your creative process works -
I sit in front of the computer, draw till it makes sense in the current storyline…
(no there’s a bit more then that)
Okay, I poked around the site until I found something to improve. Very solid system ya got here. Makes me wish I could stand canned webpages instead of reling on homebrew sites…
ANYWAY, you could do a bit in the Archives. Divide it in to basic stories, throw some sketches in there. Something like that. As it is, you either have to know the comic really really well or jump around to find a page you’re looking for…
The comic is now broken into storylines.
Well done CD!
The only substantitive change I would like to see is strips appearing MORE OFTEN! Otherwise, even with the spelling and usage (diction) divagations, it’s great! No one’s perfect; we all need an editor…
I think whenever you draw someone’ face at an angle, you always draw the chin far too recessed.
Also, and this could just be me, but I think you draw mouths a bit too cartoony. I know it’s hard to draw a good mouth, and it’s easy to see the facial expression intended, but it looks a bit awkward.
Also, when you draw hands (And sometimes arms) they can look far too thick.
Its your comic, your expression. That said, I kind of like this one (IDoaJB) well enough that I wish you were inspired to do twice weekly updates.
Yes. Your peripheral art does get noticed when you change it in the title bar.
Jean’s TNS attitude does put me in mind of this haiku I wrote.
Mighty Mouse fingers eagle
Yes—I shoot the bird
I have two suggestions. My first is to do a thorough spell-check/proofread before you post your strips. As someone who tends to like looking at the comment threads on webcomics, I know the person(s) who have dared to correct your spelling have generally been met with negativity from other readers, but I don’t see why readers shouldn’t be allowed to give constructive criticism. Correct spelling is important. That said, the spelling errors seem to be concentrated near the beginning of the comic, so maybe this particular suggestion isn’t necessary. *shrug* In that case, may I suggest going back and correcting those errors, if you are able to and have the time?
My second suggestion is something I only just thought of, because it’s about something I didn’t notice until the second time I looked at some of your strips. Perhaps it’s just my monitor, but it seems that Jeanie and a few other characters have a rather pasty skin tone that ranges from grey to green depending on the strip. It’s…kind of unpleasant. And I’m actually pretty sure it’s not just my monitor because someone in the forums commented on it: http://community.910cmx.com/index.php?/topic/9106-green-jean/. If you can somehow make the characters less pasty, that would be rather cool.
Well, there’s my two cents! Looking forward to future updates!
Spelling and grammar improvement is an ongoing issue on both comics. I continue to try to improve, and I do re-read the comics a number of times before publishing, but sometimes the errors still get threw effectually when the check is done, RIGHT after making the comic.
The reason some people have been blasted for posting grammar corrections, isn’t because they post corrections, it’s the matter in which it’s posted. Yes, I suck at spelling. Yes I often mess up, Your vs You’re, Their and There, and common mistakes. They’ve been blasted because they feel the need to put myself and others down while pointing out the errors. There hasn’t been posts blasted, or blocked for just pointing out errors in a polite matter.
The Skin issue has been pointed out and shouldn’t have reoccurred since I’ve been using a standard colour pallet for all the comics.
full pages. not strips. crossover with the Wotch &/or El Goonish Shive.
my suggestion is get back to the neil and jeanie storyline
Get back to the TG beginnings. Does Jeanie even remember she was Gene? She sure has never seemed to be either excited or upset by the change, just sort of accepting it.
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